Post Reply a poem it thought when i heard fireworks
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Posted 2/14/08
Fire works

I hear the booming sounds from my room
I close my eyes and cover my ears
The nights come rushing into my mind
The crashes The yells
The police come
I am scared
Its like a battlefield out there
I lie next to my dog and think
Fire works are like fights,
They make loud noises,
and the police come.
And I fall asleep
dreaming of times before the fighting.

So there is my first poem.How was it?If you have questions just ask me.
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Posted 2/15/08
Good!!!...u compared tha fire works...and the fight!!!...so good!!!...very very good!!!...continue!!..Congratulations
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Posted 2/15/08

david_k_belanova wrote:

Good!!!...u compared tha fire works...and the fight!!!...so good!!!...very very good!!!...continue!!..Congratulations



Thank you I tried to wright it like a teen looking back on her childhood its kinda wat happened with me
Posted 2/16/08
Great job!, thats really good especially considering it's ur first poem... first poem I wrote was no were near being this good
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