Post Reply Eclipse Poem by Sailormermaidsun13
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Posted 7/26/08 , edited 7/26/08
I'd like u guys to read and tell me what you think. (Just to tell you though, you might not get the cold one refrence if you haven't read the twilight series.)

Eclipse Poem - Jacob's point of view

I see her clearly in my heart
Piecing me like a sharp dart

I see her smiling at the cold one
My life is officially over, it is done

The forest is now my only home
You were my protection, my dome

Darkness creeps over my life
Heartbreak is my greatest strife

Tears aren't in your eyes
The hope you gave me was my human disguise

That one last tender kiss
Is something I'll surely miss

Beneath my feet are shards of glass
As sweet memoreis of you pass

Sadness and remorse start coming
As what's left of my human heart stops drumming
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Posted 8/3/08 , edited 8/4/08
the ending was very intelligently done. and i could feel the emotion of a welcoming sadness.. i like it cuz that way you can understand why..
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