Post Reply A Rose
Posted 9/15/08 , edited 9/15/08
A Rose

Upon the hill a winding path,
Scattered with leaves in all their wrath,
A secret lay between the trees,
One to know and sure to please,

Through the winding trail behold,
The wonders of beauty centuries old,
Further across this broken puzzle,
A stream aside for one to nuzzle,

Where dreams flow down the waters abyss,
In the sun to glint and kiss,
Oh, the river leads to unknown,
To a house abandoned, outgrown,

It stands there in such bliss,
Surely no one could miss,
Such a sanctuary, quite the escape,
Amidst the foreign landscape,

The skies behold, the heavens part,
Stars shine, inspire the heart,
A place no one could suppose,
Hiding on the petals of a rose.

Please comment and tell me what you think!
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Posted 10/2/08 , edited 10/2/08
This was truly a beautiful poem.
In all honesty, I've never been fond of poems that rhyme... since they used to sound severely childish...
but this one digresses from that presumption...
(Aside from the words "nuzzle" and "puzzle", but that's really just me.)

The scheme and ryhmes are intelligent, and the poem itself archaic (or at least it sounds that way), graceful and serene.
(Especially so since I have "Wave of Sand" by Kitaro playing in the back ground (He's famous for his soundscapes.))

Really, it really is a beautiful poem
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