she is not there
Posted 5/18/14 , edited 11/16/14
This is a little something i wrote after messing on my guitar for a while.
I'm not really confident about my writing skills so i wanted to show it to someone who really doesn't know me.
Please feel free to criticize and to change anything you want, just don't change the concept of the story.
Your opinion is really appreciated =)

story of empty steps
of classy people walking pass
she is missing her real mask
she has the master switch in her hands

she is not aware she has been condemned
a lawful trap, she’s falling back

He is gonna make her wait, she’s gotta move again
another fool misses the chance
He is gonna wait, he is gonna stand right there
He has the mask
he wears the mask

well shit, the war is coming again
we gotta start searching again
well shit, the war is coming
God, she is not there

She is not there
she is not there
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Posted 7/19/14 , edited 7/20/14
I like this.
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Posted 7/20/14 , edited 7/21/14
What genre is it meant to be?
Posted 11/16/14 , edited 11/16/14
indie rock/ accoustic
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